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FIC: The Guard's Tale (Valiant Tales)

Title: The Guard's Tale
Series: Valiant Tales.  Read them in order here.
Rating: PG
Characters:
The Master (Simm), other characters
Genre: drabble
Spoilers: Minor spoilers for The Sound of Drums and Last of the Time Lords.
Summary: A series of drabbles about the people who lived, worked, and suffered on the Valiant during the Year That Never Was.  100 words according to MS Word.
Disclaimer: The sandbox belongs to RTD and the BBC. I'm just playing here, in the corner, making little sand-TARDISs.


 

It’s the best job ever.  Lots of chances for fun, just don’t touch the Master’s pets.  Put a finger on the old guy – you die.  The Freak is invitation-only.  I’d love to watch a session.  Techs are all off-limits.  Pity.  Turner in engineering looks like a poof who’d jump if you gave him a hard look.  We can’t even talk to the admin staff.  There’s one real hottie --  snobby university bitch, but I bet I could make her moan.  Maybe she’ll make a mistake, piss ’im off.  A bloke can dream, yeah? 

Nobody calls Jimmy Stone a loser now.


Comments

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kensieg
Sep. 30th, 2008 03:38 am (UTC)
owwww! what happens to Jimmy Stone after The Year that wasn't?
lindenharp
Sep. 30th, 2008 03:53 am (UTC)
That depends on who winds up dealing with him. If it's UNIT, disposing of one of the Master's junior thugs... just prison and retcon.

If it's the Doctor... he might be too emotionally weary to do anything other than toss the little bastard to UNIT. (See above).

If it's Jack... I don't want to think about that. If he discovers that the Master's sadist-in-training is also the delinquent who messed up Rose's life... burial alive? Pteranodon kibble? Weevil bait?
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kaffyr
Sep. 30th, 2008 03:51 am (UTC)
Not only are your writing skills remarkable, but you're inventive and clever - and curious about the very world you've created, as evidenced by the twists you have decided to employ. Bravo for seeing exactly the kind of person who'd do well under The Master.
lindenharp
Sep. 30th, 2008 05:16 am (UTC)
Thank you! Most of the guards are of the tough military variety -- competent, obedient, and good at maintaining security. And then there are the thugs, who are fun to have around, and very useful for certain purposes.

My mood reads "surprised" because I did not know the name of this guard until the very last minute. The lightbulb flashed, the choir sang, and I slapped my forehead and proclaimed my amazing ignorance.

And, if it isn't too rude to give concrit to a review, your last sentence should begin with "Brava". I am female. :-)

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rabecka
Sep. 30th, 2008 05:18 am (UTC)
Just catching up on this series, and it's absolutely amazing. I think I'm in awe of how many unique stories and voices you fit in just 100 words each. You're weaving a whole tapestry out of little snippets, and I look forward to any future ones.
lindenharp
Sep. 30th, 2008 06:06 am (UTC)
Thanks! Switching into needlework geek mode for a moment, I think it's a quilt, rather than a tapestry -- individual squares, each a complete design in itself, but adding to the overall pattern.

The stories are also starting to intertwine a bit. The "university bitch" that Jimmy wants to shag -- or to be honest, rape -- is The Aide. Turner (the tech he'd like to beat up) is the one who's been getting sleeping pills from The Medic. (And Turner is a central character in one of my long stories.)
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crabby_lioness
Sep. 30th, 2008 05:49 am (UTC)
Wait a minute. Is this Rose's Jimmy Stone?
lindenharp
Sep. 30th, 2008 05:55 am (UTC)
Yeah. Surprised the heck out of me when he introduced himself. I had a completely different last line planned, and one that did not include a name.
themolesmother
Sep. 30th, 2008 06:26 am (UTC)
Whew! I'm really hooked on these. The last line of this one was a great twist. The previous one, about the journalist, made me shiver.

Friending you, if that's OK.

MM
lindenharp
Sep. 30th, 2008 04:21 pm (UTC)
Thanks for the kind words.

The last line of this one was a great twist.

No one was more startled than I was. At one point, I was playing around with an opening line, something like, "I haven't had this much fun since me and Jimmy Stone [robbed a small store and beat up the elderly proprietor just for the heck of it]."

It was not a conscious decision on my part. Hey, wouldn't it be interesting to make the narrator Jimmy Stone? I had written the whole drabble (150 words in the first draft), and Jimmy just spoke the last sentence to me.
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golden_orange
Sep. 30th, 2008 06:42 am (UTC)
Ooh, nice twist. And I like the little links you make between the characters.

And I really want this one to get his comeuppance.
lindenharp
Sep. 30th, 2008 04:23 pm (UTC)
And I really want this one to get his comeuppance.

Feel free to write it. :-)
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hab318princess
Sep. 30th, 2008 12:25 pm (UTC)
I know I'm repeating myself but I hope you don't mind - this is great!
lindenharp
Sep. 30th, 2008 04:25 pm (UTC)
*blushes* Somehow, I think I can bear up under the strain of repeated compliments. ;-)

Thanks for taking time to comment.
wendymr
Oct. 1st, 2008 02:00 am (UTC)
Absolutely brilliant. The perfect finishing touch, too.

Referring back to your comment on a previous one of these drabbles, and not to sound patronising (I hope I don't!), you don't need to aspire to be anyone when you grow up. You're already more than a master at your art, and I think a lot of us here wouldn't mind being you ;)

I'm loving these drabbles, even if I don't have time to comment on many.
lindenharp
Oct. 1st, 2008 07:33 am (UTC)
Rambling about writing and writers -- LONG
Some of you folks may want to click back and read something else, not because this is getting personal or private, but because it's going to be long and possibly uninteresting. Despite being a woman who has developed a reputation as a drabble writer, my natural style -- in conversation and in writing -- has much in common with the Mississippi River. It is lengthy. meandering, and sometimes murky.

Wendy, I don't think you sound patronizing, and I hope I don't sound fawning, because I certainly don't mean to. I don't truly want to be you -- but I do envy some of your writing skills. Your gift for bringing characters and relationships alive -- especially the OT3 -- in simple, lovely language, stirs envy in my soul. High on the list is Dimensionally Transcendent, especially the first four chapters.

You are not the only writer I envy, I confess. DameRuth's ability to describe the Doctor's essential alien nature in just a few words is wonderful, Glass Houses being my favorite example.

There are others, but it's 2:00 in the morning, and my mind is not as clear as it might be. I should mention that I'm talking about authors whose writing skills I envy -- there are many others whose work I enjoy and admire, but I don't particularly want to write like them, because it doesn't fit my style.

Some of this feeling is for reasons I've alluded to in email, after you've beta-read a chapter for me. Let me see if I can explain it coherently. I sometimes have trouble writing about the process of writing.

There have been some chapters that I was not sure of. They seemed dull, or lacking action or suspense, and yet you found them exciting. Or a cliff-hanger which seemed fairly predictable to me, left you startled. Because I trust your honesty, and your judgment as a writer, I have to believe that this is so.

So, it comes down to what I call "authorial blinders". It's hard for me to have a clear perspective on my own work. The surprise at the end of the chapter isn't much of a surprise to me, since I've written it, re-written it, and read it three dozen times over. I can appreciate a nice turn of phrase or a clever bit of dialogue in my own fiction, but I see them "through a glass darkly". Then I read someone else's story, and it's all fresh and new, and the language jumps out at me, and I think, Wow! I want to make people feel like this when they read my fiction. Apparently, some people do feel like that when reading my stories. The paradox is that I can't read through their eyes.

I'm not sure there's a solution, short of taking some retcon just before reading my own story.

I don't know if this makes much sense, but I wanted to say it. And although it was Wendy's comment that triggered this meandering epic, anyone else is welcome to jump in and discuss the author/reader paradox.

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