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Fic: Forever

Title: Forever
Characters: Nine/Rose/Jack
Series: Changes!verse
Rating: R
Words: 100

Spoilers:
none.
Summary: It's the first time they've made love, and it feels like forever.
Disclaimer: The sandbox belongs to RTD and the BBC. I'm just playing here, in the corner, making little sand-TARDISes. Not making any money, not asserting any claims.
A/N:
Just what it says on the tin: Rose, Jack, and the Doctor in bed together.  Erotic, but not explicit.  Takes place shortly after Changes. Beta:  the wonderful wendymr.


A threesome.  Nothing new, only... that's Rose: soft, warm and inviting, the Doctor beside her.   The muscled frame matches Jack's fantasies, but it's the relaxed, unguarded face that makes him hard.

Rose's ragged gasps become whimpers.  The Doctor's eyes turn black as he explores her.  She reaches blindly for Jack, hears his muffled groan.  The exquisite torture doesn't stop. 

The Doctor is slowing Time.  Desire is endlessly prolonged. Jack's going mad; Rose sobs.  The Doctor suffers too, controlling Time, but not himself.  Finally. pleasure sweeps them over the edge towards release.  The Doctor grins wickedly; pleasure can also last forever.

Comments

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nightrider101
Mar. 29th, 2009 10:21 pm (UTC)
Oh, very nice! *fans self*

Gorgeous and hot!
lindenharp
Mar. 30th, 2009 12:23 am (UTC)
Thank you!
wendymr
Mar. 29th, 2009 10:31 pm (UTC)
I really like the final version! :) Definitely erotic and loving, and just as I imagine their first time to be :)

Part of the Clues etc universe, perhaps? I could definitely see this as having happened some time between Changes and Lyonesse.
lindenharp
Mar. 30th, 2009 12:47 am (UTC)
I really like the final version! :)

Thank you. And thanks for nudging me to make the needed changes.

Part of the Clues etc universe, perhaps?>

Yes, it is. I really should name the darned thing. There's a limit to how many times I can write, "This is another story in my unnamed series about Rose, Jack, and the Doctor traveling together as partners and lovers". :-)
maniacalshen
Mar. 29th, 2009 10:52 pm (UTC)
Sweet and hot!
lindenharp
Mar. 30th, 2009 12:50 am (UTC)
Thanks!
honorh
Mar. 30th, 2009 12:12 am (UTC)
Wow. Very hot. I love the suggestion here instead of telling; it guides the imagination, which is incredibly sexy.
lindenharp
Mar. 30th, 2009 01:22 am (UTC)
I'm glad it worked for you. "Suggestion" is the way I need to write this sort of thing. I can read and enjoy explicit stories, but it's not my style of writing.

Thanks for the comment!
mithrel
Mar. 30th, 2009 01:51 am (UTC)
Squee! Oops, sorry, I meant great job!
lindenharp
Mar. 30th, 2009 02:24 am (UTC)
*jumps up and down* I made her squee! I made her squee!

Ahem. Thank you so much for your kind remarks.
garpu
Mar. 30th, 2009 06:20 am (UTC)
I'm a huge fan of the "less is more" camp of steamy bits. I think they're way more tantalizing (like your ficlet) than a blow-by-blow account.
lindenharp
Apr. 13th, 2009 05:24 am (UTC)
Thanks. I'm not very good at detailed sex scenes. Don't mind reading them, but not especially good at writing them.
garpu
Apr. 13th, 2009 06:34 am (UTC)
Smut is *hard* you know? I think it doesn't help that there's so much bad smut out there.
lindenharp
Apr. 13th, 2009 02:31 pm (UTC)
I know. Which is why I'm so hesitant to try it. I think I could avoid the worst of purple prose, and with practice, I'm sure I could improve. I'm just not that motivated.
garpu
Apr. 15th, 2009 07:11 am (UTC)
I know the feeling...I think it's more of a creative problem to be solved in my mind, though.
rose_cat
Mar. 30th, 2009 09:08 am (UTC)
How lovely and subtle! And I like the Doctor manipulating time to make it last longer. (He does like to be in charge, doesn't he?)

Now, if I could only find my bunk :)
lindenharp
Apr. 13th, 2009 05:27 am (UTC)
Yes, he does like to be in charge. And in in this particular case, neither of his lovers could do what he's doing.
nina_ds
Apr. 13th, 2009 03:14 am (UTC)
Lovely suggestiveness, and I particularly like the idea of the Doctor playing with time to prolong the pleasure — I don't think I've come across that idea before, but oddly (I know I'm odd), one of the sexiest moments in the show so far, I thought, was when Nine slowed down the Galaxy-Quest fans in EOTW. Which leads to this:

but it's the relaxed, unguarded face

Yes, it would.
lindenharp
Apr. 13th, 2009 05:46 am (UTC)
Jack understands keeping ones deepest feelings hidden. He's done it for most of his life. And he recognizes that the Doctor is a thousand times more closed than he is.

So, that kind of openness would please Rose, but it would really stun Jack.
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