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Drabble: Hubris

Title: Hubris
Author: Lindenharp
Rating: All ages
Fandom: Torchwood (set in early Series 2, after Jack's return)
Characters:
Jack Harkness, team
Genre: drabble, character study
Word Count: 100
Spoilers:  none
Summary: Pride goeth before destruction, they say.
Disclaimer: The sandbox belongs to the BBC. I'm just playing here in the corner. Not making any money, not asserting any claims.
A/N: This was written as an entry for the Drabble Last Author Standing competition.  It is unbetad.


Jack’s in London when Ianto phones him, reporting misty ‘spectres’ in Llandaff.

“They’re Turvikons. Harmless. Send—“

“Gwen and Owen are en route. Sir.” The last word’s an afterthought.

Jack’s glad his team coped during his long absence, but dammit, he’s back now. “Turvikons hate water. Spray them."

“Wait!” Ianto snaps.

I’m in command! “Owen, spray them!”

Owen curses. “They’re attacking!”

“Find something with a strong odour!” Ianto shouts. Gwen’s bottle of Panache averts disaster.

Not Turvikons. Mrftvani. Deadly when provoked. If Ianto hadn’t checked the archives... Jack shudders. ‘Pride goeth before destruction’. My pride, but always someone else’s destruction...

Comments

( 7 comments — Leave a comment )
garpu
May. 18th, 2011 12:13 pm (UTC)
Funny, touching, and chilling...
lindenharp
May. 19th, 2011 12:24 am (UTC)
Thank you!
canaana
May. 18th, 2011 02:36 pm (UTC)
I still love the ending line, and it still feels a little "fast" to me. I'd love to see what this looks like as a drabble and a half or a double drabble.
lindenharp
May. 19th, 2011 12:29 am (UTC)
*nods* thank you for the suggestion. You know I value your advice. I may rewrite it someday, but there are so many other fics demanding my attention. . .
canaana
May. 19th, 2011 12:37 am (UTC)
Heh. I'm familiar with that feeling.
badly_knitted
May. 18th, 2011 07:45 pm (UTC)
Maybe next time, Jack won't be so quick to jump to conclusions. His mistakes can cost other people's lives, even if he can't die permanently himself! Thank goodness for Ianto's thorough research.
lindenharp
May. 19th, 2011 12:31 am (UTC)
Yes, Ianto's research is often a mightier weapon than alien tech or Jack's bravado.

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